<p>I can't really explain this, except that maybe I was just nervous. The need for examples completely left my mind and instead I discussed two aspects of how technology can hinder progress, especially from teen years to adult years. </p>
<p>I discussed how technology could erase the mastery of basic english in teens and how it could lead to social difficulty. Both ideas were supported clearly and related to the original thesis.</p>
<p>My grammar, structure, and diction were very good; I would say well above-average.</p>
<p>I took a course and they emphasized using two concrete examples. Based on this, what do you think my essay grade will be?</p>
<p>how do you expect to succeed if you didn't do EVERYTHING exactly the way your prep course told you??? there's only one set, right, super-clearly defined way to write an essay after all=)</p>
<p>PS: I mean, I thought that the heavily structured essay was crap, anyway, but I still wanted to follow what they said if, in fact, that is what the college board wanted. It was really just a heavily persuasive essay; to be honest, I liked it a lot (as just an essay, not an SAT essay).</p>
<p>wow you must not be very good at CR either if you can't see irony/sarcasm.</p>
<p>and for the record, yeah i meant JUST a 2 since if you don't follow a set structure, all hope for anything better is lost. i mean it's not like they grade the sat essay holistically....they dissect it and look at it piece by piece.</p>
<p>um i didn't use "concrete" examples. actually i used one (i talked about thoreau and walden pond). I also used two examples: one about people getting fat, and the other about people who were kidnapped by indians liked living less technologically and so did not want to return to english society. i wonder if that counts as a concrete example. my topic sentence for that paragraph was "technology leads to moral deterioration"--i know, a bit dramatic, but hey who cares. Honestly this X number of examples thing is stupid. and i never took a class nor have i ever written any essay remotely like this.</p>
<p>I had a weird example, that could possibly be slightly almost hopefully not off topic, but a really good 5 paragraph essay (in my opinion), I talked about how without the use of modern technology, athletics would be vastly inferior to the way it is now. Citing Nike and the waffle tread assisting in advancing running times, safety in rugby and football, and entertaining matches brought on by the use of advanced synthetic soccer balls. By not using modern equipment we hinder ourselves and create unnecessary problems. It could go either way I could get a 12 or a 2, we'll see...</p>
<p>@al_tassadar: In March, I only had one example (the system of checks and balances in the US government) that ended up being really drawn out. I got a 10 and wound up with a 740 writing score. So it can be done...not a 12 by any means, but not devastating either.</p>
<p>What if I talked about the Amish and nature conservationists? Lols, random, I know...I also threw something about the Ludites in the conclusion (again, more randomness). Will they grade me harshly if my essay was more generalized?</p>
<p>i talked about the invention of the cotton gin and its effect on the South (led to increase in slavery, too much dependency on foreign markets, no industrial development leading to a defeat at the hands of the north during the civil war), and the atomic bomb, which seems like a pretty popular topic. i wrote an entire page on the cotton gin, since i had a lot of good stuff to say, but then i didn't have much time left for the atomic bomb paragraph. assuming the essay was very well-written and the grammar was fine, what do you guys think i'll get? hopefully i can squeeze out an 11 :)</p>