<p>hey im applying to MIT EA and wanted to get some feedback for my essay idea. the toughest thing for myself and prolly for everyone else is to write an inspirational story that moves the admissions people and tells your own story without trying to sound overly dramatic and trite. anyways, here's mine...</p>
<p>i wanted to answer essay A which is... "Tell us about an experience which, at the time, really felt like "the end of the world" -- but had it not happened, you would not be who you are today. Describe the process through which you discovered value in the negative."</p>
<p>when i was younger (around 6th grade) my family was in a bad situation where basically my dad couldnt be around for a few years. it hurt my family very significantly financially, forced us to move, caused a lotta pain/tension etc etc. but in the end, i moved to a great school district and made lots of friends, i was forced to mature because even at the young age of 11/12 i had to make sacrifices for my family by quitting travel hockey (my favorite sport) so my parents wouldnt have to pay for the crazy costs, and what not. it also made my family bond stronger and we realized that even though we had these economic hardships, we have so much more than most families with divorced parents or something like that because we had each other.</p>
<p>that would be the gist of my essay. i would do my best to let my voice shine through and be genuine.</p>
<p>id like to get some honest feedback on the idea. i really like it personally bc it was a big part of my life and shaped who i am today. ig uess ill try to express that as best as i can. any advice on how to shape/organize it would be good too.</p>
<p>thanks</p>