my 2nd draft, penn communities essay. a lot better now? critiques please harsh ones

<p>Who wants to read my 2nd draft of my penn communities essay</p>

<p>hi i’m new around here =) fellow 2014, but if u dont mind, we can do a trade. i need some1 to review my amherst essay too!</p>

<p>merry xmas!</p>

<p>sure i’ll swap</p>

<p>PM me your essay and i’ll pm you mine</p>

<p>hey, ill edit ur essay if u want. nothing else to do here lol. PM it over to me</p>

<p>same here. I’m willing to swap around :slight_smile: just PM me.</p>

<p>bump</p>

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