My brother needs a critique asap!

<p>Hey all, I'm looking for a seasoned reader to critique my brother's UC essay and need a pretty quick turnaround (by the end of Monday would be optimal). I'm already at a UC myself but am completely swamped at the moment and would like a couple other opinions anyway. Someone already in college would be preferable :). Please PM me if you can and thanks in advance!</p>

<p>bump bump…i don’t care if you’re in college (:</p>