<p>We’re not insulting it. We’re providing constructive criticism. If we were insulting it, we would be offering statements of marked crudeness and vulgarity; however, we instead have bestowed upon you insightful remarks on how to revise it in terms of its message, ability to engage the reader, etc.</p>
<p>I don’t think that telling me you feel asleep in front of it 4 times is quite constructive…nor is telling me it’s super dull, and worthless, which is basically what most previous posts have said…anyways I can’t do anything about it anymore, it was all sent in last night, guess i’m screwed cause of my terrible writing…<em>shrug</em> my parents both proofread it and liked it, oh well.</p>
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Does… not… compute. :/</p>
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<p>does it compute now?</p>
<p>sarcasm is not to be confused with vulgarity and crudeness.</p>
<p>Yeah, so your point was very clear, my essay is boring to tears…I didn’t feel that as being constructive or polite, it rather just hurt my feelings, but I guess that’s just me being too sensitive.</p>
<p>Yep, but you wrote that after. So… fail.</p>
<p>Sorry, but I’m done with you. You have basically just insulted people in your 23 posts so far. CC is about helping people when you can, and getting help in response. Not putting others down, or getting defensive.</p>
<p>I’ll concede my comment in this thread was a bit acerbic; however, in my thread, it was you who failed to stick to the topic of my thread and instead was the one who initiated in mudslinging, not I.</p>
<p>I do believe that some of my fellow posters and I could use better writing skills. We should have been more discreet with how we provided our suggestions. We gave constructive criticism, but we forgot to mold our thoughts into more pleasing sentences . Forgive us (I’m not trying to be sarcastic). HSMCCP, just drop the subject. Thank you for your help (I’m serious about that), but further explanation isn’t necessary- she wrote a subpar essay and now she knows that.</p>
<p>I believe that everybody should learn a very valuable lesson from this thread. Never, ever, trust your parents’ judgment. I’m not trying to belittle our their abilities. It’s just that they know you so well, so they understand where your thoughts are coming from no matter what you’re trying to write. It’s better to have a complete stranger read your essays because he’ll perceive your writing the way an admissions officer will.</p>
<p>Wow. Okay.</p>
<p>It is a little cliched.
Focusin on one single experience would make it much better</p>
<p>I guess I just felt like all the experiences explained who I am, better than just one. In most of the supplements my essays were entirely different and focused on one main point (and things other than traveling, of course), but in my main common-app essay I tried to make a point about all my experiences, being that they were all life changing for me. I guess it seemed to make more sense to me?
Thanks for the opinion.</p>
<p>Methinks we should revel in appreciation rather than bitterness towards this thread. It is a rare occasion that such a level of captivation has been presented to us on the CC forums, a captivation that may be a bit on the dark side nonetheless.</p>
<p>I only explained one situation in my case, and I hate to brag but it was an amazing essay.
Nina, many people give harsh criticism that it is much more better than honeyed praise. It’s like medicine: bad tasting stuff is good for you.
I could pm you my essay, but you have probably already submitted apps.</p>
<p>I’ve already submitted my apps. I thought my essay was good too, I guess it wasn’t necessarily a good idea to ask for advice on CC, after all who knows what the colleges i’m applying to will like. I’ll just have to wait, cross my fingers, and hope my supplements, recommendations, and all the rest help out if they aren’t impressed by my essay.</p>
<p>When you ask for advice, Nina, brace yourself for frank words.
Best of luck. Everyone here has tried to help you, even though they sounded like rude, brainless trolls.
If you didn’t listen to their advice, it is your loss.</p>
<p>Most of the replies came in when I had already submitted the essay, so I had no chance to change anything.</p>
<p>Then what was the point… o.o</p>
<p>Well the first real opinion I received was around 3hours after I posted the thread, by then I just figured i’d send in the applications cause of the deadlines. I didn’t know about CC before a couple of days ago, otherwise I would have posted much earlier to be able to make some changes.</p>
<p>You’ve submitted your essay. Nothing good can come from your reading these critiques now. My advice is to stop reading all this blah blah blah and focus on something positive.</p>
<p>Nina,
reading your essay, it was immediately clear that you had your pre-college education in Europe as it was written in the typical “ideas essay” that it is typical there. You have great experiences but you need to show what you got out of them, not just list the countries that you visited and throw quotes.There is a major philosophical difference between US education including college level and the majority of the rest of the world. In the USA they want evidence based that’s why there is a stress in statistics for all fields, not just pretty ideas and whimsical musings.</p>
<p>You still have time to add 2-3 additional schools for safeties and re-write your essay so it can have more impact. Due to your GPA, (and that you have good scores only in French-it is the same reason that taking Chinese/Spanish when you have that background is completely discounted whether it is 800 or not, and I was told that by a former ivy admissions officer) your essays and recs will have more weight. There are many schools that have a Jan 15 or later due date.</p>