<p>I'm writing my Yale supplemental essay and it's really really rough. Can someone give me some constructive criticism on it so I can make it better. I'd really appreciate it :) I really want to know if you hear my voice in the essay and after youre done reading it, I want you to tell me one thing you learned about me from it. If you can't, then I know what to work on! Thanks in advance!</p>
<p>I'd be happy to take a look =)</p>
<p>I can lend an ear (or eye, I guess, heh). You can PM me.</p>
<p>thanks guys, i'll send it to you tomorrow because for some reason my microsoft word isn't working...</p>