<p>USNAson- </p>
<p>the only thing tangible I can offer is perhaps a few things to keep in mind:
As there are 10 "items" on the list, I will label them the "10 basic steps to your personal essay"....</p>
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<li> There is no "one winning formula." No "right and wrong." What you do want is to make the admissions folks sit up and take notice....a "WOW- we really need this kid!!"<br></li>
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<p>So keeping that in mind, write from your own personal experience/thoughts/etc.... make it about why YOU want to attend- not what you think the admissions folks want to hear....if you have trouble getting started, start with a "free write"...whatever comes to mind...and work from there.</p>
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<li><p>Also keep in mind that this is about you, and what sparked your interest-
or how an event or incident in your life has shaped or impacted you and who you are....if it is related to your dad, then what is it about his service-specifically- that had this much of an impact on you and your desire to attend? Is this to follow in his footsteps, or are you looking to leave a set of tracks of your own? Try and pin down YOUR reason why you desire an appointment / career as a Naval Officer.</p></li>
<li><p>follow the directions -
if asked for 500 words, give them 500....
not 550 or 600...</p></li>
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<p>remember, part of this is also your ability to follow directions....
confining your statement to 500 words will force you to get right to the point, as succinctly as possible- which, in itself, can be challenging.</p>
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<li><p>write from your own experiences, from the first person....who knows you better than you and can tell your story better than you?</p></li>
<li><p>avoid the "I Thinks"..... what I mean by that is "I think I will make a good officer because....."..... instead, change your "I Thinks" to "I Knows".... I KNOW I will make a good officer because......
when it comes right down to it, you either know something or you don't....
and if you don't know, what will the admissions board think?</p></li>
<li><p>Be yourself. Not more than yourself, and not less. Don't blow yourself up into something you are not, or humble yourself so much that you don't take credit that is yours to take. Try and be as objective as you can, something along the lines of "tell the truth, the whole truth, and nothing but the truth"..... something like that. Honest.... perhaps that is what I am aiming for.</p></li>
<li><p>Write several drafts until you get your message down clearly the way you want it........ </p></li>
<li><p>......then give it to others to proofread, knowing there is a good chance you will be going through several more revisions. Ask several people to "PLEASE READ WITH A VERY CRITICAL EYE"...to see if what you mean is what they "get," if your message is clear, if it makes sense and follows a logical flow. Give it to your english prof to check for grammer errors, etc. Get as much feedback as you can and revise it accordingly, from both people that know you well AND those that don't know you well at all. Remember, if a stranger doesn't "get" what you mean, then chances are neither will an admissions person.</p></li>
<li><p>Don't waste your precious 500 words on something that can be found or known about you in another part of your application. If you have "captain of foosball" listed in your athletic CV, then don't repeat it in your essay....UNLESS your essay is something you learned while serving in that capacity as captain......
instead, use your 500 words to describe something about who you are that will not be found anywhere else in your application package.
Remember, this is the one way "you" get to be "at the table" when your file is reviewed..... if you were there in person, what would you say to make your case for an appointment? </p></li>
<li><p>and last, you have 500 words to "use"...make every single one of them count....</p></li>
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<p>Best of luck to you!</p>