Need an adult's take on my essay

<p>Hello! I'm just wondering if there is anyone on this forum willing to review my Common App essay critically. Thanks!</p>

<p>I’m a working professional and volunteer helping students with college planning and essays. I’ll read and provide you feedback as long you’re not in urgent need of short turnaround time (like 1-2 days). I’m a new member and haven’t reach 15 post to write or respond to PM. So PM me with your essay and email, then I can respond.</p>