NYU essay -- what intrigues you?

College Essays
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<p>Deadline is tomorrow! Need help, FAST! This is what I have so far...</p>

<p>At one point or another every human will realize that he/she is alive. We are granted the greatest gift I can fathom: consciousness. Otherwise, what is humanity? Consciousness, being aware of your own place in the endless universe of atoms and energy, is what makes us humans. It is the source of our questions, our emotions, and our purpose. </p>

<p>On the cusp of adulthood, I am struck with life’s questions. I don’t know why I am here. I am not sure if there is a god, or what is god. I don’t know who I am. It seems to me that the more I dig to find answers to these questions, the thicker the soil becomes. There are millions of questions, billions of answers, and one is left to sink or swim in a sea of uncertainty. </p>

<p>Do the answers to my questions lie in religion? Are they hidden amongst other people and human interaction? Will I find them within myself? The simple and beautiful fact is that I don’t know; The scary one is that no one else does either. </p>

<p>I am intrigued by life. I am grateful that I am conscious, but am I burdened with responsibility? I wonder if questioning the meaning of it defeats its purpose. My point is that I don’t have the answers to life’s questions; instead, I am fascinated. I am intrigued</p>

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<p>Tell us about one work of art, scientific achievement, piece of literature, method of communication, or place in the world (a film, book, performance, website, event, location, etc.), and explain its significance to you.</p>

<p>I’m not sure your essay fits in what they want, honestly. Your essay really just seems like you are stating random facts and questions, not as much the specifics which intrigue you. I would suggest thinking of something that resembles consciousness and compare it to life. Also it doesn’t sound very good when you say “My point is that _____”. You should be able to show your point, not tell it. Sorry if I am being harsh ;o</p>