Perhaps the weirdest intro you've ever seen...

Applying to College
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<p>I wrote this essay for Stanford EA, and I'm quite proud of how randomly weird the intro is, but perhaps the rest of the essay needs some tweaking. Any help (read: harsh critiques) would be greatly appreciated.</p>

<p>Oh, and if anybody wants to critique my short answers (3) along with this essay, that would be even better.</p>

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<p>I dare you to crack the weirdness barrier I set in my Yale EA essay. Bring it on :)</p>

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<p>I will give your essay a read and give you my opinion</p>

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<p>ok....let's see the extremities of college apps...bring it on</p>

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<p>Weird? Ha..let's see it!</p>

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<p>lol ill read it!!</p>

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<p>OKay, post the intro and see if it gets any of us interested enough to want to read the whole essay.</p>

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<p>PM it to me.</p>

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<p>ill comment on your weirdness...pm please</p>

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<p>i wanna see weirdness</p>

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<p>ill see it</p>

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<p>me too, !!!</p>

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<p>i have nothing to do at the moment so send them here</p>

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<p>lol. i'll comment again, the long and the 3 short</p>

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<p>send them all to me :p i'll be glad to tell you if its truly weird.</p>

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<p>This reminds me of my To Kill a Mockingbird essay for English III. I quoted Yoda and talked about how Star Wards and TKM are similar. </p>

<p>I wouldn't mind reading and perhaps scrutinizing your essay.</p>

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<p>would love to see the wierdness</p>

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<p>I'd love to see it. Though nothing can match the utter weirdness in my essays ;)</p>

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<p>i'd also love to read the weirdness.. PM me.</p>

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<p>The consensus from my readers so far has been that it isn't that weird. Here's the first paragraph:</p>

<p>To any outside observer, she was far from perfect. Linda was bulky, inefficient, and jerky, nothing like the other slim, perfect models. But we could not have been more proud of her.</p>