Personal Statement Examples

Colleges and Universities A-Z University of California - Los Angeles
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Hey UCLA FAM!!
I need help on my personal statement, the only thing wrong with my application.

I started both and revised it multiple times. But I’m never sure whether I’m improving or not. People say that revising is always good, but it might stray away from my main point, thus hindering my essay.

If possible, can people judge my personal statement? I dont want to ask you guys for yours. ’

Also, I read the personal statements online–the supposedly good ones–and I cannot compare myself to them.

Can anyone help? UCLA, or UCB or UCSD are the best UC’s I’m capable of going to.

If needed,
4.26 gpa
33 ACT
good recs, lots of extracurriculars where I’m the leader/participating a lot, 800 on math2 and 710 on physics,

intended major is engineering

overall, I’m the typical applicant. I understand that. But Im hoping this essay will give me a boost in the running.

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Even though it’s ironic I’m responding in here under the name “berkeleybetch”, I’d be happy to help you with your personal statement.

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Really? Thanks!! May I ask where you go?
If you want, I can send my essay or if not, I just have a few questions.

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@ikim16 Yeah, send your essay, and I’ll make a simple google doc with comments and suggestions. And I currently am still in high school. lol