Personal Statment

Anyone that successfully transferred into UCLA or UCB would like to gives some tips on personal statement? I have my first draft and would love it if anyone has the time to look over it! I only said UCLA or UCB cause i’ve heard they are the pickiest with personal statements and they are also my top two choices.

I used Brain at ■■■■■■■■■■ to edit my drafts and he was a great help! He helped to make my essay much clearer and much more vivid.

This is from 2015.