<p>Hello there : D
I tried to write an essay today under the 25 minute time limit, but I failed. I kept on writing it though, did some research on the internet, and only finished it in about an hour.
Please tell me if I used bad/irrelevant examples, or if maybe I used too many transitions (Honestly, I also feel like I go off topic in some sentences too...)
If anything in general is out of touch, then please tell me.
Also, I would of offered criticism to someone else's essay too, but I don't feel that I'm good at writing one myself yet, so...yeah. I don't think I'm ready to do that yet.</p>
<p>Anyways, here it is. </p>
<p>Assignment : Do people accomplish more when they are allowed to do things in their own way?</p>
<p>If we're restricted by other's convictions and limits to the ways that we can accomplish our goals, then we will never attain true success. I believe this to be a universal and general truth, for it can be clearly exemplified in innumerable ways, such as in the Beatles, who gained fame by doing it their own way, or in the great Honore de Balzac, who stayed obstinate to his aspirations, and hence became one of the founders of realism in European literature. An experience in my own life has also portrayed this to be true to me.</p>
<p>First of all, The Beatles, an English rock band from Liverpool, achieved their success and fame by not listening to others and taking their own road in music. Consequently, Bealtemania spread throughout the world, which made them an international hit. Then in April 4, 1964, they made history by monopolizing the chart's top five positions in the Billboard Hot 100. Later on they even made a movie, called "A Hard Day's Night", which perfectly portrays just how much success and popularity they attained.</p>
<p>Likewise, Honore de Balzac, a great French playwright and novelist of the 19th century, attained perpetual triumph by doing things his way, and not the way others pressured him to. Most of his life he was condemned by his family for becoming a novelist and was regarded as a failure. Moreover, he dealt with horrible financial debt, which haunted him to his death. But, notwithstanding all that, he was still determined to become a legend and make his very own masterpiece, which he did with his magnum opus "The Human Comedy", which is the perfect portrayal of his hardships, and what they have taught him. In all, it can be said that he truly gained what he sought, and all by taking an independent approach.</p>
<p>Futhermore, personal experience has also taught me that only by doing something in one's own way can true accomplishment be achieved. This I learned when I had to prepare for the sports competition in my neighborhood. My peers urged me to prepare in the ways they thought to be the best and the most productive, and I abided. But, after having yielded unsatisfactory results, I came to understand that methods of preparation should be chosen mainly based on one's own individual and subjective qualities. In result, I took an independent approach to my training, which was much more efficacious, and won the competition. </p>
<p>Indeed the best way to reach success is primarily by one's own subjective and individual ways. Perhaps in the future society will better understand this truth, and will give more freedom for others to act on their free will.</p>