<p>My main concerns with the essay is if it is too cliche and if it adequately answers the prompt-Some students have a background or story that is so central to their identity that they believe their application would be incomplete without it. If this sounds like you, then please share your story- thanks for the help.</p>
<p>I am willing to critique - parent POV, with lots of experience reading personal statements from applications. </p>
<p>I can read it if you want!</p>