please critique my common app essay

College Essays
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<p>it's about 600 words. please and thank you!</p>

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<p>sure. pm me</p>

3

<p>bumpity bump</p>

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<p>sure thing. pm me.</p>

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<p>pm it over</p>

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<p>Hey PM me as well please!</p>

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<p>Okay. PM away!</p>

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<p>pm me im excited 10char</p>