Please give me feedback on my Personal statement!

College Essays
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<p>Can anyone read my essay and give me feedback please?
It's prompt #1 for UC. </p>

<p>Prompt#1:
Describe the world you come from — for example, your family, community or school — and tell us how your world has shaped your dreams and aspirations.</p>

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<p>I’ll read it can you also read mine please?</p>

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<p>I’ll read it! I will give you feedback.</p>