Please give me suggestions on my SAT essay

<p>This is the first SAT essay I've ever written. I did it with time to spare so I can make improvements. Please tell me what I need to do to get a 12 on the test tomorrow</p>

<p>This is the prompt </p>

<p>"There is, of course, no legitimate branch of science that enbales us to predict the future accurately. Yet the degree of change in the world is so overwhelming and so promising that the future, I believe, is far brighter than anyone has contemplated since the end of the Second World War."</p>

<p>Assignment: Is the world changing for the better?</p>

<p>Please give me suggestions on what I can do to improve this as an SAT essay. I see immediately that I could have done a better job linking my thesis with the prompt. I had 7 minutes left and used all the paper so I will use more time to plan tomorrow. Anyway, give me advice and a grade please!</p>

<pre><code> Edward Munch's The Scream was painted just years before the outbreak of World War I. Although many were then predicting a peaceful era driven by scientific advancements, what they got instead was the most turbulant 100 years ever experienced by humanity. Prospects at the end of World War II were looking no better than at the beginning, especially with the Cold War on the horizon. How it is possible to say that today, only 13 years after the collapse of the Soviet Union and therefore the Cold War, prospects look good I cannot understand.
The United States has lost a lot of its galvinization to war. Vietnam brought home soldiers that were not heroes but baby killers. 30 years later, the anti war sentiment is wearin goff. The future of the United States is in doubt. The 9/11 attacks also attacked the American values of pacifism, that the world will fix itself in peace. Instead, it is citizens of the United States that have the most to fear. Orange terrorism alert levels are reminiscent of nuclear threats and shelter preparation. A society that lives in fear cannot be changing for the better.
Around the world several areas are threatening to dismantle world order. If the Balkans region was the "powder keg" of the world just before WWI, the Middle East is its parallel today. Relations between Israel and the surrounding Arab countries are extremely volatile. What good are new scientific advancements if all they allow for is the building of a huge wall and rifles that fire deplted nuclear ammunition.
The world and the United States are at a turning point and the road forward looks bleak and dreary. The invasion of Iraq has destroyed the balance between the United States and European powers. Nuclear building programins in Iran and North Korea threaten further military action. Russian reconstruction is turning into a farce, with its money going overases and being poured into trivial things like sports teams. There is not a stable region in the world. The world is changing but certainly not for the better.
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<p>the info is definately there...and its coherant...and well this essay if it took up the two full pages...the graders would give you a 5 ot 6 definately. so my advice...write and fill up the WHOLE SPACE...cuz you definately have material in your head to work with. peace out</p>

<p>thanks for the confidence boost!</p>

<p>the only thing - while I understand your desire to mention the Scream - it really does not tie smoothly with the text. You do not develop the image in any way - not even in the end. It is just hanging out there. the WORST thing you could do with an introduction. This could be a reason for a 5 insted of 6. Overall, your knowledge is solid. If you try to keep it at the core as you did with this essay, there is a potential 6 there:)</p>