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<p>Grade my essay please! Read it quickly (3 min) and grade holistically. Grade on a scale 1-12.</p>

<p>"Truth is more of a stranger than fiction." This quotation stresses the elusive nature of truth. Self-knowledge is a personal type of truth that, for some, is a known. For others, it is as elusive as the "stranger" in the quote."</p>

<p>Assignment: Do we need to be faced with hard choices in order to understand the truth about who we are?</p>

<p>In his acclaimed poem the "Road Not Taken," Robert Frost tells the story of a man who faces a difficult choice. Frost's character faces a dilemma, but ultimately choses the road "less traveled by, which makes all the difference." "The Road Not Taken" shows how difficult choices reveal the truth about who we really are. People must confront challenges and make difficult decisions to uncover the truth about who they are. American literature is filled with stories of unsure, indecisive characters facing hard decisions, but ultimately achieving self-realization. Similarly, history reveals how people must face trial and tribulation in order to learn more about themselves.</p>

<p>In Nathaniel Hawthorne's Scarlet Letter, a character named Rev. Dimmesdale faces a seemingly insolvable dilemma. For the entire novel, Dimmesdale is caught in a dither: he can't decide whether to reconcile his adulterous sin. The reverend contemplates whether he should tell his congregation that he has commited aldultery with a despised member of the community, Hester Prynne. As he faces this hard decision, Dimmesdale learns more about himself, and ultimately learns enough to realize that he should reconcile his sin with the community. In the end the reverent "finds God" and reveals his sin to the community.</p>

<p>In a similar vain, during the course of the Civil War, the United States learned more about itself as a nation. The arduous war taught the democratic nation that it was more than just a loose association of states; rather, it was a united, coherent body. Under the leadership if Abraham Lincoln, the US learned that a "house divided could not stand," and unification was necessary at all costs. The Union confronted hard choices during the civil war, and ultimately learned that the "United States IS," not the "United States ARE."</p>

<p>In conclusion, hard choices enable people to learn more about themselves. Dilemmas pose an opportunity for self-realization and learning. The United States and Rev. Dimmesdale both faced unique, unprecedented hardships, but in the end, they both learned invaluable information about themselves.</p>

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<p>Very nice; I’d say 11-12.</p>

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<p>I like the content, but I feel as if I’m reading several loosely connected paragraphs, not a coherent and well-structured essay. You basically mention 3 examples and tie them together at the end with a weak summary of a conclusion. I’ve found that the best format to use is an introduction followed by two strongly developed body paragraphs and then a good conclusion. This allows you to only have to come up with 2 examples, which will give you the time to effectively convey your ideas. 2 well-developed examples structured appropriately within an essay are infinitely better than 3 examples that are sparse in details and don’t fit well within the context of the whole essay. (A note about examples: if you want/can’t think of anything, you can make up a personal experience and flesh it out. You don’t necessarily have to be truthful or use just literary and historical examples.)</p>

<p>Your introduction should contain a thesis that serves as the springboard for your examples, which then lead into a conclusion that ties everything together and serves as more than just a summary of the preceding paragraphs. (Though I do get the feeling that you rushed through your conclusion and did it within a minute or so; you completely ignored your Frost example and spewed a somewhat BS line at the end…that brings me back to my point that you should use only 2 examples.) Don’t use “In conclusion,” to start your conclusion; jump straight ahead and make your point. This will allow you to build a much stronger ending that is capable of standing on its own.</p>

<p>Score: 8 or 9. The examples are good, but the essay as a whole isn’t very strong. Proper structure will turn this into an 11 or 12 (most likely the latter).</p>

<p>Some additional thoughts: Ultimately, the College Board is not looking to evaluate your skill at writing. What the graders really do is check to see if you’re following a template, thereby making this section utterly useless at judging how well you really write. (The same could be said of the test as a whole, but we’ll not get into that…) Just do your best to deliver what they want, and you’ll be fine.</p>

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<p>The essay could be stronger and more well-developed. Your organization taps in and you have nice examples however they are not developed enough for a great score. And you had some kind of repetition in pragraph one which would seem abundant.</p>

<p>I would grade this with a 4 myself. So 4+4 =8.</p>

<p>Someone else would might give you a 5 but a very weak 5, so if you are lucky this would earn you a 9.</p>