<p>Prompt: It is wrong to think of ourselves as indispensable. We would love to think that our contributions are essential, but we are mistaken if we think that any one person has made the world what it is today. The contributions of individual people are seldom as important or as necessary as we think they are.</p>
<p>Assignment: Do we put too much value on the ideas or actions of individual people?</p>
<p>We do not put too much value on the ideas or actions of individuals. Individuals like Darwin and Einstein have changed the world with their "ideas."</p>
<p>Charles Darwin invented the theory of evolution. This theory states that all species are somehow related to each other. For example, it is said that humans have evolved from apes. The similar bodily structures that humans and apes share suggest that before humans came about, apes existed; then, us humans evolved from apes after millions of years. Darwin's theory was and still is world changing - it is widely accepted by scientists. Today, anthropologists base their work off the theory of evolution; this theory has become the foundation for science. If Darwin had not developed this theory, science would never have progressed the way it has.</p>
<p>Albert Einstein developed numerous theories related to physics - the study of the interaction of matter and energy. Einstein's most prevalent theory is "E = mc^2." This theory/equation states that any interaction between particles on Earth produces energy no matter what. If light interacts with an object, energy is produced. If anything interacts with anything, energy will be produced. Einstein's theories ultimately developed the foundation for physics. His exceptional studies have resulted in major progression in areas of science that involve atoms. Similar to Darwin's theory, many scientists also base their work on Einstein's findings. Had Einstein not developed his theories, we may have never been able to function and control electricity.</p>
<p>Indeed one's ideas or actions may never directly lead to the end product that is created as a result, but they can set a rudimentary base that others can use in order to bring the unimaginable to fruition. Darwin's and Einstein's ideas helped create the type of advanced science that has developed today.</p>
<p>Your intro is incredibly weak.
Why do you have ideas in quotes? Don’t expect your reader to understand what you mean.
“…then, WE humans…”
world-changing, but I think that that’s an incredibly weak word.
Your two examples are mostly about ideas, so I wouldn’t even mention actions in your intro/conclusion.
Your examples are a little weak.
Your conclusion starts off well, but gets weak (in my opinion). </p>
<p>I revised it a little - let me know if it’s good.</p>
<p>We do not put too much value on the ideas or actions of individuals. Charles Darwin’s ideas have helped in understanding biology. Albert Einstein’s ideas have assisted scientists in understanding the world and how it works. </p>
<p>Charles Darwin invented the theory of evolution. This theory states that all species are somehow related to each other. For example, it is said that humans have evolved from apes. The similar bodily structures that humans and apes share suggest that before humans came about, apes existed; then, we humans evolved from apes after millions of years. Darwin’s theory was revolutionary, and it is widely accepted by scientists now. Today, anthropologists and many other science-related professions base their work off the theory of evolution; this theory has become the foundation for science. Darwin’s theory has helped in certain fields like phylogenic analysis, where scientists research genes and their functions. The theory of evolution has helped phylogenic analyzers to identify unknown functions of genes by using already known genes to aid in research. Darwin’s theory has also aided in the research of medication. Through this revolutionary theory, scientists were able to discover that bacteria have the ability to develop resistance to antibiotics through evolution; this has led scientists to developing different ways of fighting against these bacteria. If Darwin had not developed this theory, science would never have progressed the way it has.</p>
<p>Albert Einstein developed numerous theories related to physics - the study of the interaction of matter and energy. Einstein’s most prevalent theory is “E = mc^2.” This theory/equation states that matter and energy are equivalent and interchangeable. This means anything that has mass has energy and vice versa. This theory also indicates that larger masses have a greater amount of energy. Einstein’s theories ultimately developed the foundation for physics. His exceptional studies have resulted in major progression in areas of science that involves atoms. An example of this progression is the Large Hadron Collider in France, where scientists dissect atoms with expensive machinery and study their depths in order to discover new atoms; if new atoms are discovered, the mysteries of Earth and nature have a greater possibility of being solved. Similar to Darwin’s theory, many scientists also base their work on Einstein’s findings. </p>
<p>Indeed one’s ideas or actions may never directly lead to the end product that is created as a result, but they can set a rudimentary base that others can use in order to bring the unimaginable to fruition. Darwin’s and Einstein’s ideas have helped in creating the type of advanced science that has developed today.</p>
<p>I would rate this a low score–probably a 5/6, since the intro is too weak, as is the conclusion. Also, using ‘we’ makes it seem less professional, and there are no SAT words in it.</p>