please grade my SAT essay..! PLEASE..!

Is the world changing for the better…?

Every second the world is evolving and we are learning something new. Now the question arises whether the change is pleasant or abominable . There has been a lot of growth and development in the world if we compare it to the past . So, the question " is the world changing for the better " is fallacious . In other words , world is changing for the better,not worse . The evidence supporting this fact throughout history and life is pervasive.

Rosa Parks , today known as the mother of civil rights movement fought a lot against the discrimination of blacks . She jeopardised punishment and jail for not giving up her seat. In Montgomery district , the front seats of the buses could only be allotted to the “whites”; blacks were only allowed to sit at the back only if the whites have been assembled. One day , when the driver asked Rosa to give up her seat,she refused to do because she felt that she had the right to sit on her seat . She was tired of segregation . She was incarcerated for not listening to the driver .

Martin luther king,as we all know the leader of the civil rights movement, launched a boycott of Montgomery buses. Around 17,000 blacks carried the protest for one year . Finally the supreme court intervened and declared the segregation in buses as unconstitutional . Martin luther king had the vision and dream of bringing a change in the world. He controverted discrimination and pursued equity . He said that people should be known on basis of their talents , not on the basis of their skin colour. Today , there is equality between blacks and whites ; there is no kind of distinction. Blacks live their live their lives like any other white does. They have the full freedom. So , isn’t this change better for the world?

We are conversant with what is happening around the world . We get to know so much about the weather,natural calamities etc through the help of satellites . People are becoming more and more aware everyday . Issues such as molestation,rapes,threatening etc have taken a firm stance in the world. The world has become closer now with the help of social websites such as Facebook,twitter,what’s app and many more.

To reiterate , the world has changed for the better . The examples from life and history show that world has changed out lives dramatically and made our lives much more euphoric and easier.

Please tell me all my mistakes… Which other examples can I include…? I want to score atleast a 10…
Thanx in advance

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?? Please grade my essay…,

The end of every body paragraph needs to directly answer the prompt, which you did only on your second example. In other words, the second paragraph needs to explain how the world is better now, rather than just implying that we no longer have segregation and racist incarceration.

Okay… Thank you so much…around how much can I get for this essay…?