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<p>Topic: is the world changing for the better?</p>
<p>With the development of technologies, teh world has changed itself several times during its course of history. The agricultural revolution and industrializaiton have altered the world forever. With the new wave of revolution, the digitalization, there are many opinions about wehter the world is evolving into a better state or not. Absolutely, there are many improvements in the world that made some people's lifes much more convenient; however there also are serious consequences for the better flie we attained.</p>
<p>After the industrialization, pollution have become one of the major concerns of the world. As more adn more machines use up the fossil feul, the carbon dioxide emitted is causing serious catastrophy such as desturction of ozone layer, green-house effect, and devastation of many invaluable ecosystems. Studies have shown that since the beginning of the 1800's, the ozone layer, protecting people from the harmful electromagnetic waves emitted by the sun, has been severly damaged and created a big empty hole on the south and north poles of the earth. The destruction of O3 layer, due to harmful gases emitted by mechanization and use of fossil fuels, will increase the chance of people getting skin disease or cancer, and the dearth of ozone layer is also letting more heat from the sun to radiate into the earth and heats the atmosphere up. Although mechanization and use of fossil feul, has brought the human race many benefits and conveniences, the consequence with similar or more intensity for those also exists.</p>
<p>Not only there are environmental costs, but also there are cyber or digital consequences. With the emergence of internet, people were able to communicate with others who are physically very far away from each other. Internet induced faster communication among people and rapid development ofthe world. Not surprisingly, the consequence for the creation of internet also is a huge problem. In the internet, people are able to fake themselves and cheat on others. Internet not only is a very efficient tool for developing the world, but also is one of the best utilities for crimes to occur. For example, when I was surfing on the internet shopping, I bought a mp3 player. I payed much money on the mp3 for its price and transportation fee. It was supposed to be delivered to me in 3 days, but even after 2 weeks, the mp3 did not arrive. I became doubtful and decided to find out what really happened. In fact, the internet shop was just a fake one, an dthe seller was a theif. This experience shows that although internet has been constructive for humans, but it is also a sharp sword that many hurt the people.</p>
<p>The world is indeed changing and every people want to change in positive way. Howekver, even though the world might seem to turn in positively, but there are dire consequences hidden behind.</p>