PLEASE HELP! Anyone read my Duke supplement?

<p>It's for Trinity Arts and Sciences...
It's not too long (only 320 words) and I'm planning on sending it in today. I just need someone to quickly look over it and offer feedback on grammar and content . It would be much appreciated! Fast(er) responses would be absolutely amazing, as I am sending it in very very very soon (AKA in a few hours).
Also, I may be a little choosy on who I send it to, just to be on the safe side >< It may not be all that good....But....I WANT TO GET INTO DUKE :D
THANK YOU</p>

<p>Anyone? D:</p>

<p>I will gladly read it. (I am also a senior but I’m not applying to Duke)</p>