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<p>Do We Need People in Order to Better Understand Ourselves?</p>

<p>Other people are necessary for us to understand ourselves better. Millions of examples from everyday life and literary works clearly demonstrate that when one realizes the faults of other’s actions by vividly observing all the consequences they have, one tries not to repeat them.</p>

<p>In the novel 1984 by George Orwell, the main character – Winston sees the effect of the deleterious actions of fanatic partisans who betray their parents, experience no joy in life and live in fear of “Big Brother” – an oligarch who has total control over the country and the people in it.
The people in Winston’s world are too afraid to experience the life; their thoughts are controlled by Though Police, their speech, mimics and actions are under constant surveillance; even a twitch or a wrong expression at a certain moment may lead to their imprisonment. The hero himself works at the Ministry of Truth, a place where history is changed and fabricated in such a fashion that the Party always ends up right, while those who go against it are fully obliterated from the history, rendered into ‘unpersons’ records about whom are no longer available to anyone.</p>

<p>Winston is an intellectual, who – after observing all of this, starts having rebellious thoughts. He best of all realizes the consequences that may follow his actions/thoughts, yet he can’t help experiencing hatred towards “Big Brother,” the Party and the people who thoughtlessly follow it.
Observation of others is what gives him the power to continue struggling for a brighter future; for happiness, that the mass of people he daily sees will never have the chance to experience.</p>

<p>After careful analysis of the novel, it’d easy to see that it’s by observation of others that Winston realizes what he may turn into; thus he acts differently, trying to avoid the average life of Oceanian citizen.</p>

<p>George Orwell wrote 1984 after he observed the power of communism in USSR countries. He feared that the life on earth may become much like the life in the novel, under the Oceanian government was. The author hoped that by observing life of his novel’s characters, people would easily realize the wrongness that the communism regime would lead the country to.</p>

<p>Hence, George Orwell’s, as well as his novels main character’s actions prove that others help us understand ourselves better. Observation of others may even lead us to molding ourselves into stronger and better people.</p>

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