Proof that SAT essays prove nothing

<p>I got an 11 on this essay</p>

<p>Materialism: it's the thing that everybody loves to hate. Few aspects of modern life have been more criticized than materialism. But let's face it: materialism--acquiring possessions and spending money--is a vital source of meaning and happiness in our time. People may criticize modern society for being too materialistic, but the fact remains that most of us spend most of our energy producing and consuming more and more stuff. Adapted from James Twitchell, "Two Cheers for Materialism"</p>

<p>Assignment: Should modern society be criticized for being materialistic? Plan and write an essay in which you develop your point of view on this issue. Support your position with reasoning and examples taken from your reading, studies, experience, or observations.</p>

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Modern society shouldn’t be criticized for being to materialistic. Pocessions tell a story about how successful a person has been in life. The more pocessions one has, the more successful and happier they appear. However, this should not be the case. I have met people throughout my life who prove that our society should be criticized for being materialistic. My uncle Bob lives in a small house, without much modern technology; but he lives a great life.
My uncle lives with his wife in a small cottage near Lake George, New York. He lives a peaceful life without much need for many materials. He does not own a television or a computer. He is happy to live off the land without being obsessed over buying new things. He does not to be materialistic, because he can live off the land with just a few supplies. Unlike many in our society, my uncle does not go out and buy new items right when they hit the market. Even if he needs something, he will wait until the price drops and most likely something better has come out before he gets it. My uncle lives a great and carefree life without many processions. My family is another example of having a happy life without materials.
For generations, my family has farmed the land to produce our wealth. We have lived in this same location for over one-hundred years. Occasionally, we will purchase a new tractor or combine to help with the work, but this is very rare. The tractor we currently use is fifteen years old. My father and I have repaired it ever since I was a little kid. Our life is great because we do not live in a heavily populated area, and we are free from the materialism of or society. When we travel, I am amazed at all the unnecessary materials that people own. It seems that they just want to try and “keep up with the Jones.” I do not understand why every needs these materials when my life is so great without them. I agree with James Twitchell when he said”…most of us spend most our energy producing, and consuming more and more stuff.” However, I hope that in the next couple decades, our society will realize what necessities really are.<br>
If our society became less materialistic, it would help every part of our lives. People like my uncle live healthy lives free from stress. My family is able to have a carefree attitude about life, and enjoy the little things that make us smile. If more people were like this, our society would not be violent as it is today. I hope that someday , our society will fall away from materialism, and not take for granted the processions they already have.<br>

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<p>BTW, I'm an upper middle class WoW addict whose parents are engineers/financial consultants</p>

<p>Maybe this just means it's ALWAYS BEST to lie, so you can write about a topic that will make your reader feel good</p>

<p>I can see even subconscious changes in mood making the difference between a 9 and an 11, for example.</p>

<p>This is hilarious. You rock.</p>

<p>I think the BTW makes it hilarious.</p>

<p>Oh, and he's my friend in real life</p>

<p>I vouch for this essay's authenticity, and for the fact that he used "poccessions" throughout the essay</p>

<p>lol haha SAT essays prove nothing we've all already established that :) nice essay LOL</p>

<p>Hahaha, nice...</p>

<p>lmao i was like damn they probably felt sympathy for the secluded farm life =/ but then i saw the btw...good job! i wish i had that mendacity!</p>

<p>haha the sat essay grading is crap!!! thats funny--no offense, but there is a lot of passive voice and not very much adv. vocab. good job though!</p>

<p>Do they grade the SAT essays much more lightly than the ACT essays? I wrote well written essays (much better than the example, but ha ha ha to you) both times on the ACT, but got a 9 each time. What the heck?</p>

<p>LAAAAMEEE</p>

<p>Was this on a real SAT or some kind of online course?</p>

<p>hah, nice essay...if anything it proves bs gets you through life..you are an inspiration!</p>

<p>yea was this an online course? b/c u don't really have vocabulary and sentence structure and all that stuff i suck at... or i shud get an 11 or 12 too lol</p>

<p>This essay is TERRIBLE. I only read a few sentences, but the few that I read were completely atrocious. I would say this essay is an 8/12 at best.</p>

<p>This person cannot even spell. This is ludicrous. The readers must have been drunk or high.. Perhaps you're lying. This is appalling.</p>

<p>no lie, i swear it</p>

<p>and yes he spelled it "pocessions" like EVERY time</p>

<p>This is not i lie, i got only got a 690 on the writing section with this 11 on the essay. I really do suck at vocabulary as "pocessions" shows.</p>

<p>LOL</p>

<p>made my day. great lie</p>

<p>I hate you if this is true. But it's probably not.</p>

<p>You guys I'm serioussssss</p>

<p>I'll tell him to take screenshots later if you want</p>

<p>I know it's incredible, which is why I told him to post it here</p>