<p>Hey guys....this short essay answer is answering the common app question and some other colleges about "my most meaningful activity and why?" i don't like it very much...it sounds too boring/bloated....ANY and ALL suggestions would be appreciated!!!</p>
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<p>Although I find every one of my extracurricular activities significant, the one that has been most meaningful to me has been my job at the Kumon Math and Reading Center. Four days a week, I tutor children of all ages in English and Math, constantly trying to enrich their lives. Through this, I have simultaneously enriched my own life with new perspectives. The relationships I developed with the countless students and their parents have motivated me to give selflessly to my community, while still maintaining dedication to my academics and my interests. The feelings I get as a child thanks me for helping him get an A on the Times Tables test or as he runs to his mom to show her his 100% worksheet have demonstrated to me my passion for helping others, which can be evidenced through my work in Kumon as well as my other extracurricular activities.</p>
<p>I think it` s a bit too cliched....like:
Through this, I have simultaneously enriched my own life with new perspectives. </p>
<p>Instead of listing cliched phrases, give us a more detalied example of your experience at Kumon. For instance, like, "John was struggling to learn the times table at first, I helped him....blah blah" .</p>
<p>Make it more personal-describe a child who you helped-be specific. It sounds like a brochure right now. Bydiscussing a shy little red headed boy who had trouble with his reading and how you made him cards with rhyming words ....etc. etc. And when he was able to read "some story" by himself, his whole face lit up blah, blah blah. By making it more personal, it becomes more interesting. And it can be a little longer too-up to 500 words so by being more descriptive, you will lengthen it and make it more interesting. Good luck.</p>
<p>Get rid of the first sentence (all but the last nine words anyhow). It's obviously true for every applicant and it'll save on words better invested elsewhere.</p>
<p>NO, it can NOT be 500 words. Please read the original post. This is NOT an essay. It is a short answer on the common app which asks you to talk about your most significant EC in 150 words or less</p>
<p>You can delete the fist sentence- it doesn’t tell the readers anything. Jump right into a specific moment when you are tutoring the kids. Show how the moment enriches their lives and yours. This topic is not the most exciting one, but I think the way you present it can make a huge difference. I’m also doing my college apps right now and these are some of my opinions.</p>