<p>I feel as if it doesn't come off as compelling or interesting. It's not a clearly cohesive story, but all in all would really really appreciate some input. I don't have anyone around me willing to review it and I have little time.</p>
<p>To be clear, this is the longer supplement essay not the "Why Yale".</p>
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