Read my "Why Yale" essay please

College Essays
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<p>Here's my response to "What in particular about Yale has influenced your decision to apply?" Do you think the analogy is a little too forced? I'm not sure if I really like it or not, but I wanted to avoid the generic "Yale is a top school so I want to go there" response.</p>

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<p>When I was a kid, I decided to apply to Hogwarts one day. I wanted to get sorted into a House, become friends with diverse and cheerful people, and have adventures every day.</p>

<p>One day, I came across the Bulldogs' Blogs, which taught me about life at Yale. I read about the unique system of residential colleges and got introduced to the quirkiness of the artists, scientists, and athletes. I read anecdotes about pre-orientation backpacking trips, walks down the beautiful chapel street, and a "Howdown Throwdown" themed freshman barbecue.</p>

<p>I wanted to apply to Hogwarts. Well, here I am.</p>

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<p>I like it! I wrote mine about how awesome Yale’s community is, too.</p>

<p>Two things: did you mean hoedown or howdown? Also, this probably doesn’t matter, but Harvard has a freshman dining hall that looks exactly like the dining hall from Hogwarts, so there are plenty of references about Harvard being the real-life Hogwarts, etc. Again, probably doesn’t matter but it was just a strange thought that came to my head reading your essay.</p>

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<p>Yep, I meant “Hoedown”. I was aiming for uniqueness, but I’m also worried about leaning too heavily on the corny side.</p>