<p>Question: Articulate the goals you have established for yourself and your efforts to accomplish these. Give at least one specific example that demonstrates your work ethic/ diligence </p>
<p>*100 word limit
* I wrote two, not sure which I prefer</p>
<pre><code>Graduating high school with an honors diploma requires advanced classes, including math which is my worst subject. Math has always been challenging for me, it takes me a lot of work outside the classroom to understand what most do in five minutes. Despite this, I have taken college level math. My diligence is shown because no matter how hard it is for me, I don’t take the easy route and challenge myself even in my worst subject.
After graduating high school, I plan to attend college. A very important goal for me is to get my bachelors degree. I have worked hard throughout my high school career to make this goal achievable. By graduating with my honors diploma, I am equipped to be successful in college. My strong work ethic has been proven by taking Advanced Placement and Honors classes proving that I work hard and have the (capability/skills..idk which word)needed to be successful in college.
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<p>I preferred the first because it demonstrates your work ethic better. However, it does need additional revisions to get it to the best version. I suggest you read each sentence out loud and delete all unnecessary words. Then use the extra words to add in additional meaningful content.</p>
<p>You can consider to finish the first topic on a high note by concluding it with the main ideas from topic 2 (ready for college and attain a college degree) and why a college degree is so important to you.</p>
<p>Scrap the second response. It’s not saying anything that admissions doesn’t already know. </p>
<p>In your first response, I assume that graduating with an honors diploma was your goal. Try to elaborate on your efforts to achieve that. Your efforts include “advanced classes”. What else? Then use the math idea as the specific example that demonstrates your work ethic. </p>
<p>The bulk of your response above deals only with the specific example. Cut “…it takes me a lot of work outside the classroom to understand what most do in five minutes.” You’re belittling yourself. Try to express your final three sentences (the specific example) more compactly. Free up some word count so you can expand upon your goals/efforts and achieve a better balance in answering the prompt.</p>
<p>You should consider writing about a intellectual goal that isn’t related to school. I guarantee many other people will write about this generic topic. Perhaps it’s more personal and effective if you write about a challenge that you overcame outside of school/standard academics like math; an experience that is uniquely yours. </p>
<p>i agree. I don’t think you should talk about grades or school work anywhere on the application. Besides maybe the additional comments section if you have something important to add that affected your school work. </p>