Rewriting my supplement...

Colleges and Universities A-Z Yale University
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<p>So I think I'm changing my EA Yale supplement last minute, but I may or may not change my mind. I've started writing another essay, but I don't want to end up with one that's less polished than what I have, and I want you guys's opinions on which essay I should use/keep.</p>

<p>The essay I have already weaves together my eclectic iPod contents and my diverse high school community to ultimately lead to why I'd like to attend Yale - lots of different brains to pick, all super intelligent, etc. Unfortunately, it's less so about me and more about my high school experience, and it sounds very average/impersonal.</p>

<p>The essay I'm writing is a reflection of a personal experience involving a surprise hospital visit, in which I realized that I don't have to go at things alone - I'd always have support from family and friends, and I matured in that I was no longer obstinate about maintaining my sense of independence and learned to welcome other peoples support.</p>

<p>The second one is definitely more personal, but it's proving to be really difficult to write. Should I keep at it and risk submitting a time-crunched essay, or just stick with my original one?</p>

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<p>Just from the idea, I like the second one, since the first one seems to speak more on the lines of “I want to go to Yale because everyone there is smart”. But you never know unless you compare the 2 essays side-by-side. Good luck!</p>

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<p>I like the second idea more- it definitely sounds more personal, since the essay asks to know more about YOU not why you want to go to Yale or why you would be a good fit there. The “Why Yale” paragraph is for that.
However, it is also important that your essay be polished and practically perfect to turn in. If you don’t think you can make it as good as you would like it to be by November 1, then maybe you should consider RD. You want to present yourself the best that you possible can.
Best of luck!</p>

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<p>Alright, thanks guys! Looks like I’ll be working on that essay today then :)</p>

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<p>I second what imagodei says. Try to write the second one, and then compare. If you feel the second one is ultimately better, but unfinished, there really is no harm in applying RD. Your chances won’t be hurt at all (even if I am a fellow SCEA applicant and I want to eliminate my enemies :slight_smile: )</p>