Rough but unique Essay. Anyone care to critique?

College Essays
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<p>PM me. No 2014ers or later please. I'd really appreciate it.
Thanks!</p>

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<p>I’ll critique it.</p>

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<p>Feel free to PM it over. I’ll give it a look.</p>

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<p>Anyone else?</p>

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<p>I hate doing this but… <em>bump</em></p>