<p>'Are people more likely to be productive and successful when they ignore the opinions of others'</p>
<p>People will be only successful and achieve high goals if they are not concerned with what others think of them. Rosa Parks, Mahatma Gandhi , and Brett Brutler are some of the people who were determined in life and opinions and thoughts of others did not effect them.</p>
<p>Rosa Parks was a first African Women, who on the bus of Birmingham demonstrated her true feelings. She refused to give the seat to the white women, which was occupied by herself. Due to this she was arrested and jailed. Though this adversity revealed that she was a strong person and a lady who refused to listen to others and at the end was successful for fighting for her right.</p>
<p>Mahatma Gandhi , public face of Indian independence movement. He refused to listen to every single person who was against his movement and stayed to his principles. He refused to move from an upscale first class train to a third class cabin and was thrown out of the train, however later again he declined to give up his seat on a stagecoach to a European passenger and was beaten. If Gandhi and listened to others, he would have not been able to bring such a extreme change for his nation.</p>
<p>If a person believes in himself, opinion of others would not effect him. With this same belief was a baseball player, Brett Butler. People thought Butler was too slow and not talented enough to make the big league. Butler ignored everyone's thoughts and proved them wrong. He made a brilliant career in the Major Baseball league.</p>
<p>Every single person has the ability to be achieve his goals and be successful, only if they have faith in themselves and ignore the opinions of others. To achieve accomplishment in life, a person does not need to be concerned of how other think of them. The only way to be productive and successful if others thoughts are ignored.</p>
<p>I would give this essay a 3. The only reason I believe you scored a 3 is because you actually finished the essay and wrote a full conclusion. However, you have some major, major syntax issues! Your thesis statement is a run-on. </p>
<p>“Rosa Parks was a first African Women”
“was a first” is not grammatically correct.
You do not a capitalize "African Women.
It’s woman, not women. </p>
<p>That was one of the better sentences. You really need to reword your thoughts. I do like the flow of ideas you are presenting, yet they are ineffective because of the problem discussed.</p>
<p>I like how you take a very aggressive stance on the issue (The only way to be productive and successful if others thoughts are ignored).
However there are problems in this sentence. Here is a more refined, concise version:
A large part of success relies on a certain confidence that isn’t shaken by the opinions’ of others.</p>
<p>Assignment:do rules and limitations contribute to a person’s happiness?</p>
<p>Rules do not limitate happiness. Instead, they offer chances for people to create it. Chances for people to reconsider about their behaviors, chances for people to avoid doing stupid things out of impulse, and chances for people to act wisely, are results of the executions of rules and limitations. Many times rules contribute to a person’s happiness. Such people widely populated the idealistic field of literature. For example, the famous literary character Scarlett O’hara, from Mitchell’s Gone With The Wind, rescinds her unconscionable obsession of Asheley Wilkes because the basic rule in marriage does not have enouh room for three people and that eloping with a married man would scandalize her family. This seemingly rigid rule compels Scarlett to forsake her ridiculous captivation about Ashely, helps her to possess herself of Melanie’s friendship and Rhett’s love, enables her to survive all the hardships, and creates chances for her belovedTara to revive from bullets and fires. Happiness is obtained when rules are carried out. Even in Charlotte Bronte’s Jane Eyre, we regard the fact that Jane and Mr. Rochester’s marriage cannot proceed because of the existence of a previous marriage not as an impediment of their love, but a catalysis of their dependence on each other. Thus, we see love not as obstacles, but contributors.</p>
<p>Though such characters are fictional, rules have motivated numerous people in history to set aside their fantasies and have created equal amount of happiness for people. Ludwig van Beethoven, for example, crucial figure in the transition between classical and romantic eras in western art music, lived a harshly instructed and ruled childhood. He was often made to stand at the keyboard, was often in tears, and was often told to obey the rule of practicing day and night. Cruel as they are though, rules impassioned Ludwig to practice even harder in order to future created his own pieces of music and has been commemorated for his inscrutable talents and passion for music, both of which are emerged under the “gloomy cloud” of rules.</p>
<p>Rules are pathetic when being regarded as torture. Rules within each individual may be pushy and against one’s initial desires, but they are at the same time benefiting us in a way we may not notice. Just us PK Plyte once said:" It is only when we understand the rules act in the name of mentors and guides that rules may contribute to our happiness."</p>
<p>Just a few tips in general essay writing for the SAT. Try to use on paragraph for an example from history one from your own life and one from literature. I got an 11 out of 12 doing this</p>
<p>@sabrinali: 8. Impressive writing skills, examples, and word choice! Your organization was below average, but easy to improve. Divide your intro and your first body paragraph. The first body paragraph should focus on one of two examples. You bring up two separate examples, one of which was mediocrely introduced, at the end of your introduction. Your introduction should end with a bold, apparent thesis statement that allows your examples to reiterate and expand on. Good job!</p>