<p>Before I ask you to read my essay, I have some questions I'd like you to answer, too. Is 3 examples always better than 2? I was taught to write 3 examples but in that case I had to keep my paragraphs short and I didn't have enough space to elaborate my ideas. My teacher also said keeping the introductory concise and briefly to the point is always ideal.
Last October my essay score was only 10; I guess I underestimated the essay readers. I didn't do enough elaboration, just filling up the two pages exactly I was taught to do-- making my point clear by repeating and paraphrasing the topic sentence. I did not elaborate anything by supporting the point with good reasons but only presented three simple examples that support the main point. Now I have SAT coming up in two? three? days. I changed my strategy, and here is my new essay. Do you think two better elaborated examples are better than three simple examples, paraphrased version of the topic sentence?
Well my question seems like out of point-- but just read my essay plz and evaluate it.... I will really appreciate it.</p>
<pre><code>Today, we are all living in the world where money is at the top of everyone's priority list; what is in the charm of money that makes people so blindly pursue after it? Many people today do works that they do not really find fulfilling just because those jobs pay well. However, doing the work that one finds fulfilling is much more important than doing the work that pays well. After all, even money is for happiness. But people grow forgetful of the true purpose of money and blindly crave for it at the cost of their own happiness.
Here is one man who knew better than that: Steve Jobs. Apple is now one of the biggest companies that produce some of the finest electrical devices in the world. However, at the beginning, it was no more than an small garage; Steve Jobs and his friend started it in the small garage, just out of their passion. Now some might criticize him and his co-founder for being unnecessarily risky and full of callow, youthful optimism. However, they probably cared neither how other people might look at them nor how they might end up. They started Apple because they found the job fulfilling. Now the garage became the center of electronics industry. If one finds his job fulfilling and pours enough effort and passion into it like Steve Jobs, money is just another gift that comes along. Steve Jobs was happy with his job, and that job made him also rich.
Another man who proved that a fulfilling work is more important than a well-paying work is Victor Hugo. In his novel "Les Miserables," the main character Jean Valjean is depicted as the epitome of misery; his life is as unlucky as any man's life can ever be. But at the end he becomes a successful, wealthy mayor and businessman. His job as a respectable mayor and big factory-owner, however, was not as fulfilling as it was well-paying. He felt uncomfortable with all the respect people paid to him because deep inside of his heart he felt that he still belonged to his miserable, sinful past. He was not happy with his job, having to live in a constant fear of being caught again as a prisoner by Investigator Javert. He had to resolve his guilt by helping more needy people; earning a lot of money is not all that there is to life. If one fails to find his job fulfilling and has to keep living an unhappy kind of life, a well paying job is useless and all the money he earns is futile.
The modern society is growing more and more materialistic. If we think about it, the reason why people want to earn much money is to live a happy life, doing and enjoying the things that money can provide. However, people often sacrifice their own happiness in the process, to get the happiness that money gives. It is a sad irony. If people put enough effort and only focus on what makes them feel happy, money is just a factor that follows along; money should not be the ultimate purpose of life, but just one of the means to achieve happiness. Indeed, a fulfilling job is more important than a well-paying job.
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