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<p>I decided to rewrite my essay. Please grade and critique please ^_^</p>
<p>“Is creativity needed more than ever in the world today”</p>
<pre><code> Creativity is needed even more today due to current environmental problems as well as technological advances. As demonstrated through google, apple, and Microsoft, our technology has improved drastically from ten years ago. Solar Panels, wind power, and other renewable energy choices are all examples of this as well.
As demonstrated through google, mircosoft, and apple, without them, we would probably be still living to age of Walkman and flip phones. In 2007, apple launched their newest addition: the iphone. The iPhone transformed the global market no just technologically, but aesthetically. No more of those flip phones or that ugly paint peeling phones, it is now the sleek, metal design smart phone. Apple has improved our lifestyle not only by phones, but also the power of versatility. The MacBook Air shocked the world by its weight and width. The iPod line has become slimmer, smaller, and more useful. Mircosoft did the same thing, but instead of the physical aspects, it changed the interior applications, most noted for the Mircosoft word. Instead of typing on a noisy, old, boxy (not to mention there isn’t a “delete” button) typewriter, this program has revolutionized the world and it continues to do so to this day. With creativity and ideas, just two people has changed how we live forever.
Alternative energy methods have also benefitted from creativity. With seven billion in population and oil depleting quickly, governments are scrambling all over the world to figure out ways to create fuel. But who would have thought that the sun, wind, and water can be transferred into it? Solar power have changed many residents living in Arizona. In fact, people who invested in solar rarely pay for their energy bill because the sun covers for most of it. The same apply for wind power generators/mills. This method has been used for centuries, but with the more power-gathering design, statistics claim that one mill can generate enough for a family for a day.
Indeed in modern times we need creative ideas to transform our future. Whether it is the exterior or interior of technology or fuel, creativity has changed it directly.
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<p>I stopped there because I ran out of time. In fact the whole 3 & 4th paragraph I rushed.</p>