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<p>I am taking May SAT. I just wrote a narrative essay. </p>

<p>Topic: Misconceptions. </p>

<p>People detect common misconceptions by interacting with others; later they are bewildered by how uneducated the majority of people are. For example, my important detection was students’ lack of understanding of straightforward rules of Physics. Initially, I thought that all students of my age are as educated as they should be in accordance with their grades, respectively. However, to my astonishment, I discovered that students viewed Physics as a complicated and tedious science; then I elucidated them that physics rules are around us. Consequently, I examined not only misconception but also its cause. </p>

<p>It was one year ago when I was assigned to one of my local summer study groups. In my country, according to general rules, each region sends students to improve their subject skills. Therefore, students were not grouped in accordance with their knowledge. </p>

<p>Even through I didn’t know Physics as well as many other students did, I was instructed to explain myriad concepts in Physics to strugglers. I decided that I will start with a simple question: “How do you imagine force?”—I asked the community members. “I have no idea”—someone quietly confessed with shame. Then I thought maybe someone would know the formulas and asked “What is F=?” This time there was no answer from the class. My attempt to explain something was futile until I encountered a good idea to try to explain everything in action. I asked for a volunteer to come up; I gave him a bottle of water and asked to drop it—the bottle went down. Afterwards, I explained that there is a gravity which pulls every object on the Earth down. And I explained that the heavier the object you take the less acceleration you can give it: “Throwing the pencil is blatantly easier that throwing a table.”—I explained. The class concurred with me; and here I could notice the first inspiration and élan to study Physics. Henceforth, I concluded that the main reasons of students’ misunderstandings were measurements and formulas: everyone, without doubt, knew that throwing light objects is easier than throwing heavier ones; however, students didn’t know that in physics such a concept is called “inverse mass-acceleration relationship”. </p>

<p>Learning, it turns out, is different for everyone. My volunteering as a teacher in local study group absolutely debunked my initial misconception that, school years—or grades—are a genuine reflection of one’s knowledge. </p>

<p>Grade from 0 to 12. </p>

<p>Thanks!</p>

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<p>I wouldn’t recommend relying solely on some personal experiences as an example. Of course you never know how will the grader react, but having at least one example from literature or history, as they are the most valuable, will most likely boost your score. Also, I think it’s a good idea to use recent political or economical events and figures as examples. Since, I suppose, you are French, you ought to know French history very well. Use it to your advantage. I always find something to rely on in French history, weather it’s any king Louis, Napoleon or French Revolution.</p>

<p>I won’t grade it, but there, I got you a nice piece of advice.</p>

<p>P.S. Try to use two or more examples if you can. If you have use one, make sure you analyze it well, just like you did here.</p>

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<p>I’m guessing a 10 or 11. I would recommend learning to properly punctuate and write dialogue and to back off all of the vocab words. A few vocab words are good, but too many looks forced. I count three in the first paragraph. One last suggestion: watch the number of sentences that start with a single conjunction or short phase conjunction (for example, initially, however, consequently, and that’s just the first paragraph). It creates a choppy paragraph. A few of these spread through the essay are encourages, though.</p>

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<p>This was a narrative essay. It is not called narrative for nothing. I mean I wrote it from personal experience. Without doubt, I can write a 5-paragraph too but I want to practice writing narrative essays too. You never know what topic would you have on test day. I really really don’t want to make up examples.</p>

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Could you please correct my mistakes? I would appreciate it very very much! :)</p>

<p>P.S </p>

<p>I think that many people have a stereotype that narrative essays are not prone to get high scores; however, many narrative essays have gotten maximum grades in the real SAT.</p>

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<p>Well-written narrative essays do tend to score high. And yours is well-written.</p>

<p>Here is a website on punctuating dialogue. You can also open any published book on the NY Times Bestseller List to get a good idea of how to write dialogue: [Punctuating</a> Dialogue](<a href=“http://www.writing-world.com/fiction/dialogue.shtml]Punctuating”>http://www.writing-world.com/fiction/dialogue.shtml).</p>

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<p>This is great. So the only problem my essay has is punctuation, right? Gee, that’s great! On my previous SAT, I got a 9. Hope I will do better this time!</p>

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<p>bump! Anyone else?</p>