Score my essay please

<p>I apologize in advance for my writing, but it is quite difficult to organize a good essay in 25 minutes.
Please give me a score/any comment on my essay! Thank you</p>

<p>The prompt is: Is there greater satisfaction in pursing a goal than in achieving it?</p>

<p>We all have goals in our lives, petty or consequential. They can be as small as baking perfect cookies, or they can be grand, long-term goals like majoring in biology. From achieving various goals, we usually feel some sense of relief because we do not have to strive so hard anymore. There is also rewarding satisfaction in accomplishment, the result of hard work and effort. Often times, great satisfaction in achieving a goal allows an individual to persevere the process of pursuing a goal, which may be unpleasant at times.
Rachel Carson, the founder of environmental movement in America, had the ultimate goal of protecting nature. She worked her way to her dream by writing her influential book, Silent Spring(1962), in which she overtly defied the use of DDT, emphasizing its deleterious effects. It was not an easy path, however, as Carson had to face criticism from and was derided by agrichemical businesses that produced the pesticide-some even defined her 'hysterical.' The process of pursuing her goal was not very satisfactory or enjoyable for her.
However, there is a reason why Carson could withstand the hostility from the companies: she believed in satisfaction from achievement. Her efforts eventually led to the universal ban of DDT in 1972 and the establishment of the EPA, an organization that would further help preserve nature, fulfilling her goal. Because Carson took pleasure in the accomplishment of her cause, she was able to overcome the obstacles she faced on her way to achievement. It was her main motivation.
As demonstrated in Carson's case, pursuing a goal is not always smooth and easy. She was passionate about writing itself, but when she saw impediments on her way, she could only cling to the promised satisfaction in achievement for hope.</p>

<p>Okay, I scored it.</p>

<p>Yours,</p>

<p>charmander127</p>