Hey all! I’m applying for the AA department at UW and need to submit a College of Engineering Personal Statement. I would really like to know your feedback as far as possible revisions and ways to shorten it would be. Also I would like to know if I answered the prompt pretty good or not. The length is a bit longer than it should be, so I will need to shorten it. If any of you are interested in critiquing my essay, let me know, thank you.
Here is the prompt by the way:
Describe how you could bring a broad perspective to the engineering classroom. Factors to discuss include, but are not limited to: multi-cultural awareness, activities, or accomplishments; educational background and goals; living experiences, such as growing up in a disadvantaged or unusual environment; and special interests or talents. (Limit to 250 words)