So you want to get a 12 on the essay? Read on.

<p>I recently encountered Naidu90's thread regarding the SAT essay. She provided her essay from the March SAT administration as an example of how to get a 12. I decided to take the liberty of following Naidu's example and reproduced my own essay, which also earned a 12 on the March administration. The prompt for both Naidu's essay and my own was: "Can being unique be helpful?" -- or something to that effect. (See Naidu's thread for more details.)</p>

<p>When I was studying for the SAT, I realized that the most important thing about the essay component is that it can be "learned." Collegeboard and PR and Kaplan are only telling you half of the story when they say that there is no formula for writing a good essay. You can develop your OWN formula, a blueprint, if you will, that you can follow when you take the SAT, that allows you to confidently build a thesis and tie in strong examples to support your thesis. </p>

<p>How do you develop this formula? I would be lying if I told you there is a shortcut to the perfect score that bypasses hard work. However, hard work does not necessarily mean "lots of work." It just means you have to prepare assiduously and think critically about the way you're preparing. To start, it would behoove you to read through a bunch of SAT essays like those in the Blue Book, and get a sense of what literary elements contribute to a great essay. </p>

<p>I intend for this thread to be a launch pad for future perfect scorers on the essay. Read through Naidu's essay and my own, and try to get an idea of what works and what doesn't work. I do not intend for my essay to be critically compared with Naidu's, or vice versa (although you can do so, if you so desire). These essays are for your benefit, for you to see styles that, while different, nevertheless lead to effective essays (and shiny 12's).</p>

<p>Anyway, without further ado: my SAT essay. Analysis (hopefully unbiased) will follow soon. </p>

<p>"The belief that one is "special" or "unique" in some way may seem trite in a society that greatly values the individual, but it often times holds great merit. It is more valuable to be a unique individual than one who simply "goes with the flow." Examples from scientific history and literature illustrate this point.</p>

<p>Albert Einstein, perhaps the most distinguished scientist of the 20th century, was in no way a person who fit in with society as a whole, whether as a child or an adult. When he was five, for instance, Albert had still not learned to talk at an age when most children were communicating rambunctiously with each other. His parents worried that he might be mentally retarded, a misconception that was perpetuated when Albert entered grade school. One day in class, Albert's teacher berated Albert for averting his attention from teacher's lecture. When asked what he was doing, Albert responded he was daydreaming about traveling on a beam of light. At such an insouciant response, the teacher reprimanded Albert and sent him home. Albert seemed to be doomed in life.</p>

<p>But it was not to be so. The imagination that had produced Albert's daydream would remain with him throughout his life, allowing him to conceive of scientific theories that no one else could come up with. His special theory of relativity, an indirect offshoot of his daydream, proved the nonexistence of the so-called ether and led to the discovery that the velocity of light does not change with respect to the observer. As an adult, Einstein's iconoclastic scientific theories, particularly with respect to the cosmological constant, conflicted with those of other scientists. However, his theories have in present day been proved, and his cosmological constant, which Einstein himself rejected, is being reconsidered. Surely had Einstein been a member of the "scientific throng," physics as we know it may not be as advanced as it is today.</p>

<p>In literature, we have another example of the benefits of individuality. Ernest Hemingway, one of the great American writers, was not one to follow the crowd. His works, like Farewell to Arms (sic), were generally replete with simple, powerful words, as opposed to the American works of the previous century, which was (sic) inundated with convoluted Latin roots. His revolutionizing of American literature earned him a Nobel Prize in Literature, and brought a new, elegant style to American writing.</p>

<p>Einstein once said that imagination is more important, at least quantitatively, than intelligence. If we have the imagination and boldness to be different -- unique -- we can accomplish the greatest of things, and perhaps more than we could have first imagined."</p>

<p>Thanks lobgent, im going to try to get my 10/11 essay up there in the 12 region :)</p>

<p>Thanks lobgent, but what's (sic) represent? A google result said it meant "thus" but I can't see how that would fit in your essay.</p>

<p>Thanks again!</p>

<p>(sic) simply shows the original, exact quote. For example, if a newspaper quoted someone in their paper, and the person made a mistake in their quote, such as, "Everyone deserves their fair share," the paper could quote it as, "Everyone deserves their(sic) fair share." Since everyone is singular, the person incorrectly used the pronoun, "Their," when the correct pronoun would be, "He or she." However, the newspaper must quote the source as accurately as possible, so they will add (sic) to show that the quote was taken verbatim, and is not their mistake. In this case, lobgent made some mistakes while writing the essay in a 25 minute span, and he or she is telling us that these mistakes really did happen and are not the result of sloppy typing.</p>

<p>Hope that clears things up.</p>

<p>Ah.. I see now</p>

<p>Thanks :D</p>

<p>One thing that yours did that I did in mine was that you did intro, body 1, body 2, body 3, conclusion, in which the 1st and 2nd body paragraph relate to he same general topic/person, yet are still about something different (mine were civil rights and then I transitioned from civil rights to Rosa Parks). Although mine got a 10, it seems like it is good to do that kind of thing.</p>

<p>I have a comment... When you used vocabulary, which was mostly excellent, there were times when it seemed like you were trying to hard to impress the readers. Don't take to this to harshly (heck, you got a 12), I just wanted to mention that you would go one paragraph with no sat words and then suddenly cram 3 into a sentence. I just came across as a little awkward, that's all.</p>

<p>Stix, I see your point. Nevertheless, I'd like to point out that I didn't intentionally use so-called "SAT vocab." I tend to be pretty verbose in my writing, and this verbosity manifests itself unconsciously. I don't make a conscious effort to incorporate words like "insouciant" and "iconoclastic" in my essay; they are usually the first words to pop into mind (as strange as that may seem). It's only after the essay is done that I think of "fanciful" and "odd." :) </p>

<p>On the other hand, this verbosity could definitely have led to a lower score if my readers, as you suggested, had thought I was trying to impress them with big words. Luckily, this was not the case with regards to my essay. However, I could see someone with a large vocab running into such a debacle, especially if the vocab became the highlight of the essay, and not the content. The lesson to be learned from this? Use strong vocab, but not to the point that you spend a minute trying to summon the 345th quintisyllabic word from Barron's vocab list. </p>

<p>As I said, I'll post an analysis of the good, bad, and ugly elements in my essay as soon as I get the opportunity. In the meantime, feel free to keep posting comments. Thanks for your support!</p>

<p>Yeah... I find a bounch of random (arbitrary?) words wander (meander? I'll stop now) into my daily happenings as well. Sometimes people just look at me like, what?!?!?! I get a laugh out of reading your comments though! Impressive vocab!!</p>

<p>I got a 12 on the essay. I had an intro and conclusion, but only 2 body paragraphs. one ex. was from biology, one from literature. also, i used a quote from history.
also, i didn't try to use fancy words at all. in fact, the only one i think was "plethora."</p>