Somebody read my pre-college program essay please?

<p>Rereading my essays, I think I might not be talking about what I've gotten from these experiences enough. Like my real essays, I usually wrap it up within the last paragraph, so that's probably not good... Can anybody give me some critique on my essays?</p>

<p>what school(s)? I applied/was accepted to cmu pre-college, so I can help you out</p>

<p>I love editing. I’ll look at it if you want </p>