Someone to read my essays

Is anyone willing to see if my essays were too rigid or too straightforward? I’m thinking maybe even in my future applications for internships or research or other positions if my current writing style is preferred over something of Shakespearean caliber lol.

I’m a professional tutor. If you have trouble paying for help with your essays, I am more than willing to help you out with it for free as pro bono work. Send me a pm if you’re interested and I can send you some additional information about what I do.

Thank you so much!

@HKimPOSSIBLE - As a general rule, you should not share your essays with posters that have not had a track record of helping students and/or that don’t have many posts. There is a thread of “trusted essay readers” here on CC that you might want to look at. Never – and I mean NEVER – post any essays online.

Here is that thread mentioned in post #3. http://talk.qa.collegeconfidential.com/college-essays/552302-consolidated-list-of-essay-readers-on-cc.html

Generally, only choose trusted people that have experience as an AO, GC, or IEC. The more people you get feedback from, the more opinions you will get, and those opinions will not all be in sync even though they might all seem so reasonable…then what?

Ah okay. I didn’t share my essays with post #1. Usually, I’m just trying to get a gauge on the general stuff - tone, focus, whether something sounds “genuine” or forced, and etc. I think I do already have a few great people to get feedback from anyways.

I’m not a professional but I helped my son with many essays with good results. If you PM them to me I’ll be happy to take a look.