<p>For the USFG I used slavery, the WWII internment camps etc. Then I used my workplace.</p>
<p>well..not to sound repetitive....but i used Nazi Germany (WWII) and Romeo and Juliet</p>
<p>My sister is discouraged (no...fatalistic and considers it the end of her life) that she did not finish. Basically, she listed her entire essay...She sounded confident about grammar, mechanics, diction, and the quality of her examples. According to her, she wrote one sentence of the conclusion which was basically a parallel to the thesis statement. For her examples, she used The Jungle in terms of its effects (FDA, Pure Food and Drug Act although she didn't remember the name of the latter) and the Civil Rights movement (even though I believe that she was more specific than most, I am angry with her because this is too rudimentary and basic). Enough rambling... Here is where I see her only error that could be truly costly. Sure, she may have proved that an ADMIRABLE change occurred in each of these two examples, but without a conclusion, wouldn't it be extremely difficult to say that these two changes were actually JUSTIFIED... Without this step, I do not think that you can say that the natural tendency of mankind to change is inherently positive.</p>
<p>Einstein's work with the photoelectric effect
Roosevelt's New Deal
The Crucible</p>
<p>wow... i just used my own life experiences</p>
<p>The Great Gatsby
Catcher in the Rye
Galileo & science in general</p>
<p>anyone else not go for change?...i talked about how the radical republicans movement after the civil war was reversed.
i wanted to go against change and use the sound and the fury and cry the beloved country, but i had forgot some key things in the latter. consequentially, this little stress made way for a hasty conclusion...sigh</p>
<p>1) bush
2) bill gates
3) nelson mandela</p>
<p>Is a page and a quarter long enough- if it is very well written?</p>
<p>^^ i don't think so, b/c longer essay = more detail, support</p>
<p>I used personal work experience, 1984 by George Orwell, and Peer Pressure</p>
<p>crap...I used all personal examples. Nothing really global. How much will this affect my score do u think?</p>
<p>Well, you know you can still get a 12 with personal examples. It's just so much harder to write a substantive essay with them.</p>
<p>I think my essay was crap. >_o I spent too much time trying to make it sound "nice" in the beginning...wasted my time. I wrote only 3 paragraphs (!), using the Great Gatsby and Thomas Jefferson as examples. I WAS going to use a personal experience in the 4th paragraph. <em>Sigh</em> Oh well. I predict a 4.</p>
<p>I used Moby Dick (Ahab not changing his mind) and a personal experience. I basically filled up two pages though, will a bad conclusion and only 2 examples hurt me that much?</p>
<p>I think I had the best example- The ancient Greek city-state Ionia during the Persian wars</p>
<p>what were everyone's essay's about?... mine was about inconsistency</p>
<p>Galileo Galilei's promotion of Copernican heliocentric model, adamance in resisting Inquisition even in house arrest and alleged denouncing of belief</p>
<p>Decision to stay at Stuyvesant High School (NYC STAND UP! #1 PUBLIC HIGH SCHOOL IN USA WOOT!) despite long commute and cutthroat competition/curriculum rigor</p>
<p>I wrote about Roosevelt and my own experience about college decision. Now that everyone mention it I should have write about racism.
Hey, thegame2388 how did you use Nelson Mandela? I'm just curious.</p>
<p>i used patriot act and my personal experience</p>