Too much "telling?"

College Essays
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<p>Hi! please read my essay and give me some feedback on it. I am afraid it might be too listy and boring. pm me, thankss</p>

2

<p>sure pm it to me</p>

3

<p>ill read as well</p>

4

<p>I can also read! :)</p>

5

<p>I’d be happy to read it, please PM it to me</p>

6

<p>oh, i can offer great ideas on that.
I would glad to critique your essay if you are willing to</p>