Two different essays. Which is better?

<p>It is 2:30 am and I just wrote two essays. One is about a hardship I faces (my family being founded on drugs and alcohol and how I learned that carrying around hate for them wasn't helping) and because that depressed me I wrote an essay about how all of the obstacles that I have faced don't define me. I'd like to have people read both of the essays and give me his or her opinion on both. I need the criticism. Be harsh. Just post here and I'll send them. I truly appreciate the help.</p>

<p>Send me them, I am willing to take a look, and give you “harsh” advice, haha, but seriously I can give some feedback.</p>

<p>Thanks. I just sent them to you.</p>

<p>I’ll read them. Can you give me a list of colleges too? That would help. Thanks.</p>

<p>Colleges include
Smith
Wellesley
Bennington
Skidmore
Barnard
Fordham
SUNY New Paltz (as a safety)</p>

<p>In that order.</p>

<p>I’d be happy to critique them.</p>

<p>I sent it to you too.</p>

<p>i’ll take a look at them</p>

<p>sent them along, thanks!</p>

<p>i would like to give feedback!</p>

<p>okay I’ll message them to you. Feedback would be appreciated.</p>