Which essay is better?

College Essays
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<p>So I've written two essays I kind of like so far. One of them was voted the best in my Advanced English class, the other one uses more imagery and goes deeper into my personality. </p>

<p>Anyone want to read them and tell me which is better for a college essay? Both are first drafts, so don't mind the spelling/mechanics. Although if you want you can check them for that too. </p>

<p>Yay! Thanks.</p>

<p>P.S.-The prompt was to write about a topic of your choice.</p>

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<p>sure pm it to me</p>

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<p>sure pm it</p>

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<p>i'll take a look</p>

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<p>PM me, I love reading essays.</p>

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<p>I'll bite :)</p>

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<p>I want to read them!
PM me.</p>

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<p>I'll help critique!
PM me!</p>

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<p>i'll take a look. pm me.</p>

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<p>PM plz? =D</p>

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<p>ill take a look please ... pm me</p>

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<p>PM it to me and I'll gladly tell you which one is better</p>