UC #1- purpose- help with focusing!

College Essays
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<p>prompt is stated below...this is what i have so far...i am stuck and need help focusing ideas...thank you!</p>

<p>Prompt #1 (transfer applicants)
What is your intended major? Discuss how your interest in the subject developed and describe any experience you have had in the field — such as volunteer work, internships and employment, participation in student organizations and activities — and what you have gained from your involvement. </p>

<p>My mom always emphasized the importance of college. Maybe she insisted upon my attending college because she struggles as a single parent of five and believes a college education would ease life’s obstacles. If education was my reason for going to college, then it did not make for a significant reason since I already had a high school education. My reason must have a deeper significance beyond education. I have since discovered that by attending college, it is not only education that I seek, but also purpose in life. </p>

<p>The itch to scratch did not stop at the sight of blood. I did not understand at my young age that scratching my eczema would only make it worse. It was then, at the age of six, when my mom decided from there on out to saran wrap my legs and arms to prevent my itching and irritation of my eczema. At age 8, a severe asthma attack hospitalized me. Breathing was difficult and “sleepovers” at the hospital became quite frequent. I was 11 when I suffered a concussion after a baseball bat hit me in my head. Two years later I had a needle lodged in my right foot which I had surgically removed. At 20 I discovered a lump on the back of my left shoulder. It turned out to be a benign tumor which I had removed regardless. </p>

<p>It is because of these experiences that I have decided to major in biomedical engineering. As a biomedical engineer, it is my goal to attend medical school and become a doctor. I feel that it is my purpose to become a doctor and help others as I have been helped. Someone once said, “To the world you might be one person, but to one person you might be the world.” I want to be the world to that one person.</p>

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<p>this essay is terrible</p>

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<p>You have like three different topics in one essay. Pick only one and explain it in detail.</p>

<p>1-your mom’s influence/what purpose it has led you to/why that major
2-your childhood illnesses/their effects on you/why that major
3-how the people who helped you with your illnesses have influenced you to become someone who can help others</p>

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<p>thank you…any suggestions to make it UN-terrible? whole reason why i posted it…</p>