UC Essay Prompt 2 Help/Advice

College Essays
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<p>Hi, I'm writing my UC prompt #2 (Personal Quality) and am having doubts on whether or not I should stick with what I've written. Long story short, I've been writing about how I found my ability to be a leader. I have doubts that it'll fly because that was a group experience. In my essay I have a lot of "we's", as in, "we decided to tackle.." or "..we were coming closer to the deadline". The essay just doesn't feel that much about me!</p>

<p>I really want to stick with this topic because it is an experience that has shaped me to become the person I am today. How can I control/narrow down the essay so that it focusses on me?</p>

<p>I could send the essay through PM for those who really want to read it albeit I'm not really close to finishing.</p>

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<p>Being an influencer in a group is a very good trait to have. Working well in a group is a very desirable skill. You could show how you influence and sway the group within the consensus decision environment. In the collaborative experience there is something that goes on before ‘we decide to’… try to define your contributions. You say this made you feel like a leader, so you just have to back that up and explain what that means to you.</p>

<p>also you can use terms like ‘as the deadline approached’ to avoid repetition of ‘we’</p>