<p>The prompt is:
Tell us about a personal quality, talent, accomplishment, contribution or experience that is important to you. What about this quality or accomplishment makes you proud and how does it relate to the person you are?</p>
<p>I think the main issues with my essay are:
-Wordiness and awkwardness
-I don't know how to end it and relate it back to the prompt.</p>
<p>If anyone's interested in reading, let me know and I'll PM it to you (preferably no high school seniors though).</p>