UC Prompt #1 Help? :)

<p>Hey guys! I would really like some feedback on my essay for the UC schools. If you'd like to look at it please say so on this forum and I'll send you a message with my essay attached! Thank you! :)</p>

<p>P.S The prompt is:</p>

<p>Describe the world you come from — for example, your family, community or school — and tell us how your world has shaped your dreams and aspirations.</p>