UChicago Essay!

College Essays
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<p>I attempted essay option 4:</p>

<p>Argonne National Laboratory and Fermilab (both national laboratories managed by the University of Chicago) have particle accelerators that smash bits of atoms together at very high energies, allowing particles to emerge that are otherwise not part of the everyday world. These odd beasts—Z bosons, pi mesons, strange quarks—populated the universe seconds after the Big Bang, and allow their observers to glimpse the fabric of the universe.
Put two or three ideas or items in a particle accelerator thought experiment. Smash 'em up. What emerges? Let us glimpse the secrets of the universe newly revealed. </p>

<p>I have never written a college application essay, especially not one that would meet UChicago's standards. I've been reading around here on the CC boards, and have noticed many people say that UChicago really likes when a student is creative with their essay and takes a risk. </p>

<p>I suddenly got an idea on how to answer this prompt, so I quickly typed something up. Would anyone care to read it and tell me what they think about it? It's extremely short, and this is my first draft, so I'll definitely be fixing it up. Heck, I probably won't even use this for my app! I'd just like to get a general idea of what it is they're looking for.</p>

<p>I can PM or email it. =]</p>

<p>Thanks!</p>

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<p>Hiya, I can read it if you'd like. I'm a really strong personal essay writer and class of 09, but I visited UChicago and now am not interested in applying there at all (I'm more of a Columbia girl, I think.) So I can give it a read for you in a PM if you're interested. I also know a lot about particle accelerators and whatnot if that's relevant.</p>

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<p>Bump.......</p>

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<p>PM me, if you want.....</p>

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<p>pm me. i will read and give feedback</p>

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<p>id love to read. Im a huge fan of CERN and particle accelerators</p>

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<p>I'll critique it. PM it to me.</p>

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<p>PM me. I have no idea about particles. But, I can help with the general.. essay parts? I hope. =]</p>

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<p>Please comment on what is the actual question behind the optional art/media essay for the university of Chicago. Can it be about a book, show, or movie? Do we have to describe the significance or something else. Please help.</p>

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<p>pm it to me plz and illz give feedback</p>

<p>and person above, want to describe where you found information on this supplemental essay?</p>

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<p>Its on the University of Chicago admission requirements page. Read the fine print.</p>

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<p>Sounds interesting. Send it right up.</p>

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<p>that question sounds so cool...i'd love to read it, pm it to me</p>

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<p>this sounds very interesting
ill gladly read over it and give you my opinion
pm it over</p>

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<p>id love to read/critique it!
PM me</p>

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<p>if you still need readers, im up for it</p>

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<p>sounds great! would love to check it out...</p>

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<p>Sure, <a href="mailto:RayAllen333@gmail.com">RayAllen333@gmail.com</a> with CC as subject - hate spam :(</p>

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<p>that sounds very interesting...
PM me!
I won't be applying there :)</p>

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<p>PM me, I would like to read it</p>