<p>My transition into High School has been far from ordinary. Although my successes have been articulated through my achievements listed on my original UC application, I was not able to share how my educational opportunities have been stunted. Due to being involved in an unfortunate accident I had a hard time assessing the limits I would be able to push myself to without experiencing repercussions. A car struck me while I was standing in line waiting for the bus. It dragged me across the concrete on the underside of the car, I immediately was rushed to the hospital where I received forty staples in my head for an open wound and thirty stitches in my leg for a deep gash.*My parents and doctor encouraged me to not overextend myself during my four years at High school because of the accident. Despite their advice, I did not want to settle for something less than my potential limits. I opted for a compromise, and due to this I did not take as many AP classes my sophomore and junior year as I expected myself to do. These extenuating circumstances prevented me from taking full advantage of all the classes and opportunities that were available to me throughout my High school career. Although I did challenge myself, I was not able to challenge myself to the fullest extent. I tried to avoid sympathy ridden paths, and in turn I applied myself in a curriculum where I could exceed expectations, slowly rebuild my confidence, and further my interests, but unfortunately that was not what I solely had in mind before being injured. More specifically, before being injured I was planning on doubling up on science classes for my sophomore year so I could have ended up taking AP Physics. I also planned on taking AP US History my Junior year, but due to the events that perspired, I was not able to do so.
By being a first generation college attendee in the family, I have also been limited in the number of resources I have had in regard to the trials and tribulations expected of students wanting to go to top colleges. I feel that I would excel at UCLA because it satisfies everything I'm looking for in a college experience. A college that is too big to know everything about right next to a city that is too big to even begin realizing the breadth of opportunities available. Being well rounded has been both a blessing and a curse, but because UCLA has an undergraduate program that has a plethora of majors that I wish to explore, I would not feel stunted in the opportunities available to me, specifically as I did throughout High school.
I would like to be considered for the environmental science major because of the work and inspiration I have
Not only but I have continued to succeed
scholarshoips etc</p>
<p>This is what I have so far. Any further grammatical errors, rewording, or sentence suggestions would be greatly appreciated. Besides the accident, would anything further help my chances such as saying what I'd bring to the campus etc? Or will they not consider anything beyond basically my first paragraph?</p>