"Unique" essay needs help!

College Essays
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<p>I have spent many days revising this essay, and I am up to the point where I need outside suggestions on how it can improve. If you would like , please read over and tell me what you think =). I will be happy to help you with yours as well. Even just one suggestion would be fine ( and a rating 1-10).</p>

<p>Let me know and ill pm it to you :P</p>

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<p>ill read it</p>

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<p>pm me, i’ll read it
and help me with mine, too</p>

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<p>I’ll read it</p>

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<p>ill read it</p>

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<p>PM me. ten char</p>